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A call for writers
« Reply #45 on: April 13, 2007, 08:32:23 pm »
OK, I'm putting my foot down, this is the final draft of Act 1.  Now let me hear your best Thomas Anderson impressions....



Adad: Awakening of an Angel



By: Joe White “Venlar”
“TBone”
Jonathan Nettesheim “Adad”

Edited by:
“Da6onet”



1 - INT. METACORTEX DAY
The camera pans across Mega City downtown. Metacortex can be seen in the distance. The camera cuts inside to DANIEL DAVIS working in a cubicle in a maroon shirt and tie. THOMAS ANDERSON comes in and sits at his desk in the next cubicle.

Daniel Davis
Hey, Tom you saved me when you covered for me yesterday. You’re my hero.

Thomas shrugs.

Thomas Anderson
Seems that’s what I’m here for lately.

Daniel Davis
Late night last night? You look terrible.

Thomas Anderson
Uh, yeah, I went out with a few… friends.

Daniel Davis
You know if you keep coming in late, Rhineheart is going to have you pulled from this place.

Thomas Anderson
Maybe that’s not such a bad thing. Don’t you ever get sick of working in this prison?

Daniel Davis
Everyday I ask myself if there’s more to life than this place.

Thomas Anderson
I’ve been told the answer will find you if you want it to. Something more is out there Dan.

Daniel stands up.

Daniel Davis
Deep stuff, but I suppose one can hope. In the mean time I have to file a few reports. I’ll be back in a few.

Thomas Anderson
Can you take this one for me?

Thomas hands a piece of paper to Daniel.

Daniel Davis
No problem.

Daniel leaves the room. When he gets off the elevator, he passes two agents. Shot cuts to him watching out a window as the agents take Thomas. He looks at the paper he took for him and it simply reads “What is the Matrix?” Fade out.

2 – EXT METACORTEX DAY
Fade in on Daniel walking to work in a gray suit. A man in white follows behind him.

Daniel Davis (V.O.)
Do you ever have the feeling someone, somewhere is watching over you? A guardian angel of sorts, protecting you from the evils of the world. I have always believed there was more to this world than what was on the surface and I have been digging at it for years.
Lately, it seems, I am closer than ever to finding my guardian angel. I have seen him in my dreams and he is the answer to the question that drives me; the question that once drove us all.

Cut to black and white shot of “What is the matrix?” on paper. Cut back to Daniel who turns to look over his shoulder at the entrance of work and the man in white is gone. He enters.

3 – EXT ROOFTOP DAY
TBONE and an ANGEL stand on a rooftop watching Daniel in Metacortex.

TBone
Today’s the day. I think he’s ready.

Da6onet
What’s so special about this guy again?

TBone
I’ve had my eye on him since our operation began. You can’t work next to Neo without learning a thing or two about the truth, and he has been looking for us for three years. We will soon discover if he is worthy of a place among our ranks.
 
The other Angel nods as TBone’s phone rings. He answers.

Pirus (phone)
He’s leaving the building now.

4 – EXT DOWNTOWN SUNSET
Daniel walks through downtown. He looks at his reflection in a window of a building, yawning, when a van drives by. After it passes, a man in white appears staring at Daniel from across the street. When he turns to look, the man has vanished again. Daniel crosses the street to try and find him when a car comes from nowhere. He sees it in slow motion with traces of code and manages to dodge it.

Daniel Davis
What the hell just happened? How did I…

TBone sees this and nods. Daniel looks up at a scrolling electric sign. Stock market information scrolls by. In between this the sign scrolls "Adad." It continues to scroll more stock information. The words "Follow the angel" go by. Shot cuts to a cross and it tilts down to reveal Manssen Park church. Daniel walks up to it and stops to look at the structure.

Daniel Davis (sighs, whispers)
Follow the angel.

Daniel glimpses at a figure moving through the air against the moon. It seems to have landed on the roof of the church. Daniel enters.

5 – INT CHURCH NIGHT
Daniel stands in the back. A man in white stands up and walks into the stairwell. Daniel follows.

Daniel Davis
You’re the one who has been following me, aren’t you? Who are you?

TBone
The question is not who I am, but who you are.

Daniel hesitates for a moment and replies.

Daniel Davis
Well, my name is Daniel…

The man cuts him off.

TBone
No. Who you really are. Life is not the one given to you by others but rather the one you make for yourself, Adad.

TBone begins to walk up the stairs, Daniel follows.

Daniel Davis
How do you know that name?

TBone
It is the life you lead outside the bonds and shackles of your job. Beyond the responsibilities of the “real” world from which you try desperately to escape. Lucky for you, that is why I’m here.

Daniel Davis
What do you mean?

TBone
You have been searching for something more, and I am here to tell you that I can show you where to find it.
It is up to you if you follow me…

Daniel Davis
What do I have to do?

         Tbone
Make a choice.


Cut to intro. Montage of Adad choosing the red pill, awakening from his pod, in the Real World training program, title.






Anyone who is doing lines for me, please e-mail the recorded files to me at:

maddogjwn13@hotmail.com

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« Reply #46 on: June 10, 2007, 09:54:31 am »
OK, i want to pick this back up.  Please send in your best Neo impressions if you are interested, and if you enjoy writing, please send your ideas for acts 2 and 3.  Follow some of my guidlines for events in them I have written in this thread.

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Re: A call for writers
« Reply #47 on: July 03, 2007, 12:51:34 pm »
Hey Adad.

I am assuming that the above excerpt is an outline for the whole story or just for act 1?  If this is for act 1, do you have a more detailed version written.  I'll try my hand at act 1 and 2, but I need to make sure that I'm not missing any details from act 1.

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Re: A call for writers
« Reply #48 on: July 03, 2007, 03:08:07 pm »
The script above is act 1.  I need 2 and 3 written based on the ideas I put into the other pages of this thread

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Re: A call for writers
« Reply #49 on: July 03, 2007, 04:00:27 pm »
nocry, you need the dolcit english tone of the nocry...

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Re: A call for writers
« Reply #50 on: July 03, 2007, 06:24:59 pm »
Quote from: "Adad"
The script above is act 1.  I need 2 and 3 written based on the ideas I put into the other pages of this thread


Gotcha!

Any key plot points you want included?

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Re: A call for writers
« Reply #51 on: July 03, 2007, 07:17:51 pm »
just what ive posted so far, there's a list or 2 in this thread

 

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